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rule001 - Joke

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...one for my lovely wife.
(still needs lots of work)
I still have to ad some breaks and vocals, but i really want to get this one right.... so... any tips?
also on wich genre to put it in.

(btw, all live synth)

edit: second try, whitout guitars

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Distreality [be] - 10 years ago

compo is good...

- i would add more punch to the kick
- lower the bass in the kick a bit
- get the snares(and rhytm in general) more upfront
- change the sound that comes in at 1:28
- add some elays on the snares here and there

Imo these are the main points to focuss on...

It has a lot of potential, big up
 

transynth [be] - 10 years ago

yea nice work, the bassdrum is eaten by the rest of the sounds, but hey that's no big change :)
great melodic work mate! Grtz!
 

orfeo [be] - 10 years ago

great melody.i like tha pads you use.Very melancolic.good 2007
 

rule001 [be] - 10 years ago

cheers for the nice (and helpfull) comments.
All the best for 2007 (...and keep m comming ;) )
 

Anonymous [be] - 10 years ago

good base!
 

Anonymous [be] - 10 years ago

Dit nummer is gewoon af. Niet te veel meer aan prutsen. De muziek vertelt genoeg zonder woorden. Prachtig. I wish I was your wife. ;)
 

Anonymous [be] - 10 years ago

tof, beetje enya-achtig, nog wat violen???
 

marcel1948 [be] - 10 years ago

Very nice sound!Just lower the bass drum volume a bit (I mean A BIT) and keep the rest like it is...a new Moby is born....
 

Anonymous [be] - 10 years ago

Roel,
de eerste en tweede inzetten vind ik zeer goed , alleen als de derde erbij komt (blikken pianogeluid, weinig melodisch in verhouding tot de rest) gaat de kracht wat verloren, misschien vervangen door "human voices" of gewoon piano - maar wat weet ervan- ik ga enkel voort op mijn gevoel, met wat werk wordt het zeker een ontroerend stukje muziek
uw TV
 

rule001 [be] - 10 years ago

that sound at 1.25 is an electric guitar with heeps of overdrive and distortion. I was kinda going for that typical '80's-rock-balad-way-to-slow to-be-a-guitar-solo' thingy. :)
I'm trying a version where i replace them with bagpipes or irish flute.
('Enya-like' background vocals will be added once i find a good voice ;) )
still a lot of work, so keep comments and suggestions comming 8)
 

Anonymous [be] - 10 years ago

Nog eens geluisterd. Piano klinkt wat "armoedig; droog, mag een vollere klank hebben, mis er iets in. Het laatste deel, waar je terug naar het "begin" refereert, mag voor mij wel ietsje korter. verder heel mooi
 

Anonymous [be] - 10 years ago

find a nice angelvoice and a wonderful songtekst,mix them together and you have an example of pure love for your wife!!! awesome!

*Tess*
 

rule001 [be] - 10 years ago

already repaced guitars by hobo, cello and piano.
Text is ready and waiting for angelic voice ;)
 

DeHomunculus [be] - 10 years ago

wonderful mate. realy relaxing. thumbs up!
 

mrfrendo [uk] - 10 years ago

hEY BIG THUMBS UP.. LOVING THE MELODY WOULD MOS DEF TURN THE BEAT UP THO KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK...:-)
 

Bedlam [be] - 10 years ago

ok this might be long !

I'd rework some of the guitar melody, the sample fits well but 1 or 2 of the melodies are not as they should be or how my ear expects it anyway :)

I'd also try not to put string everywhere in the track, and especially in the beggining try to make them more realistic (maybe by adding some attack and release, it always helps).

If you want to make it into a song, i'd also try putting more of a storyline to the song. right now it stays on the main sequence all song long, i'd add an apogée (i dunno the word in english) but an explosive part followed by a dramatic ending.

Like all in all the song has to be in a verse chorus bridge kinda structure, right now the is only verse and maybe bridge. :)

There ! hope this help !

it's very very much better than your older work ! happy to see you are developing your skills :)

Cheers !
 

Distreality [be] - 10 years ago

better allready...^^
 

DeHomunculus [be] - 10 years ago

a lovely song for your wife :D must realy love her :)) and she must love you even more :D
 

rule001 [be] - 10 years ago

cheers for the great tips and comments.
but it seems the second version didn't upload :(
guess i messed up again ;)
i'll try uploading again when i get home.
 

Sapajdacosta [be] - 10 years ago

Too syrupy for me, sorry :s
 

Distreality [be] - 10 years ago

better allready, without the ^^ (i thought i didn't notice much change last time...) ;-)
 

stryder [be] - 10 years ago

yeh cool track, needs more punch and stuff ^^
 

vinxx [be] - 10 years ago

the piano sample is cool....but the kind of music is too slowest for me....
 

yaka [be] - 10 years ago

nice nice ... idd pianoke zou ik wat voller klinken .. een paar akkoordjes of delay erop .. ni teveel ... juist genoeg hé .. verder .. schoon schoon.... wilt ge dat dan voor heel de familie doen ??? ;-)
 

rule001 [be] - 10 years ago

natuurlijk yaka, ...maar laat me dan eerst dees proberen goe te krijgen hé ;)
 

Phye [be] - 10 years ago

beautiful, abut the piano, it has it charmes, i dont think it would make your song better / worse... very beautiful
 

Light3000 [it] - 10 years ago

Lovely melody. I suggest female vocals. Some trigger/glitch in the beat might work; some field recording on start/end too. Very clean. Good job!
 

goT [be] - 10 years ago

ooooooh, soooo sweet! ;)
 
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