Electrobel

intro good a bit better ! nice heavy sounds used ( need more work on it this song ! greets

if you like makin music you should continiu and you'll hear an evolution of your own creativity.
I think lots of people are gonna hear that its one of your first tracks.
because of the buildup and short melodies,
thats kinda typical for a beginner in electronic music,
but just make lots of tracks and you'll hear an evolution,sooner or later...always a good idea to put your first tracks on e-bel for advice ;)

excellent!!!

Could nevertheless need more power on the beats... I'd also add compression and maybe some filter or phasing fx on the lead synth

How to say .. your track must be more structured, you don't use melodies who haves a link between they and sometimes you change of situation while that haven't got a meaning .. Be careful with that when you compose and you will do things better ...

Persistance is the only way!