Electrobel

it's kinde flat and man where is the fuk'n percussion,ok I can understand that it is your first but where is the rithm.It's not a bad idea but it needs some rithm.
Greetz KL

yes, percussion!
Keep working on it... (with percussion ;))

well, to be honest guys, put a big name under it, and some people might buy it as some minimal art nouveau. hey kid, i think you rock. leave the percussion out. i like it without the stupid percusion. you have your own amazing style invented, keep it. just one thing. i don't know your age, but listen to everything richie hawtin has ever made. and learn. ow yess, try yo make a remix... and try to make it soft. you don't need to be loud, to be big! use subtle kicks, use different (finer) rhytic sounds...but LEAVE the structure untouched. one word, richie hawtin aka Plastikman...www.plastikman.com

well that wasn't exactly one word, lol